Nothing could disturb Autumn Chance as she sat on a park bench reading a book and sipping on a latte. She sat there not crossing her legs even though she was wearing pants. Her hair was done neatly, she had long hair with bangs and her face appeared to be completely symmetrical. She was reading War and Peace while sitting with perfect posture. She sat on the bench listening to classical music at an appropriate volume even though no one was around to be disturbed. When she was done she stood up and walked away making sure she disposed of her Starbucks cup properly and making sure it got in the trash can.
She walked in chewing gum loudly and she pushed her way to the seat next to mine. She was wearing clothes that barely covered her and wore very loud colors. She squeezed her way in even though she knew she couldn't fit. She then forced her bag to the side making me very uncomfortable I wondered if she was raised in a barn and game her a look of confusion. She replied with a loud yes while staring at me angrily. She then took out her phone and started singing along to a vulgar song out loud. She sipped on her mysterious drink while she moved her hips to the song even though she was causing everyone discomfort.
10/10: Wonderful mastery of both the Authorial Tone and Interpretation by Another Character. Each have a certain distance attached to them, but yet still connect the reader to what is important within the passage. I love the details that you chose to include. (Autumn Chance is a great name choice!)
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